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开头：Argument + Evaluation (分段转述 + 分段评价)
Step 1: 分段转述
原题背景句：The following appeared as part of an article in a daily newspaper:
提取可用成分：This part of an article in a daily newspaper
原题题干第一句：
“The computerized on-board warning system that will be installed in commercial airliners will virtually solve the problem of midair plane collisions.
转述：
The on-board warning system is assumed to be able to address the midair plane collisions.
… be assumed to do …
原题题干第二句：
One plane’s warning system can receive signals from another’s transponder—a radio set that signals a plane’s course—in order to determine the likelihood of a collision and recommend evasive action.”
转述：
By signaling a plane’s course, this system could forewarn the pilot of possible collision, thereby avoiding airline crash.
by doing … , through doing …
warn sb. of sth.
forewarn sb. of sth.
SVO, thereby doing.
转述原题完成：
As mentioned in a part of an article in a daily newspaper, the on-board warning system is assumed to be able to address the midair plane collisions. By signaling a plane’s course, this system could forewarn the pilot of possible collision, thereby avoiding airline crash.
As done …, SVO.
As you know, SVO.
As known, SVO.
Step 2: 分段评价
As mentioned in the part of an article in a daily newspaper, the on-board warning system is assumed to be able to address the midair plane collisions. This assumption has good intent, but it, in itself, may not be logically well supported. The only supporting evidence given is the function that by signaling a plane’s course, this system could forewarn pilot of possible collision, thereby avoiding airline crash. This function has failed to preclude collisions caused not by the course of a plane, however.
语言点1：diction variety
同根词变化assume, assumption, assumed, assuming
非同根变化assume, infer, imply
语言点2：coherence
连贯supported, supporting
语言点3：adj. = doing/done
Conclusion
Assumption
Evidence
supported conclusion 被动
supporting evidence 主动
语言点4：冠词替换
a/an
the
this
that
As mentioned in …, … is assumed to …. This assumption has good intent, but it, in itself, may not be logically well supported. The only supporting evidence given is …. … has failed to preclude …, however.
To avoid plane collisions is with no doubt a good will, so this passage has highlighted the feature of signaling the course to recommend evasive action. But the effectiveness of this computerized warning system might need more evidence to verify. In addition, as for the evidence, the data employed are remaining scattered, thereby failing to validate the whole reasoning.
主体：MIT
Step 1: Mention
原文：
One plane’s warning system can receive signals from another’s transponder—a radio set that signals a plane’s course—in order to determine the likelihood of a collision and recommend evasive action.”
开头转述：
By signaling a plane’s course, this system could forewarn the pilot of possible collision, thereby avoiding airline crash.
主体转述：
The article describes a warning system capable of receiving signals from another transponder via radio and thus able to determine the course of plane.
Step 2: Imply
This description might have been attempting to mislead us into believing that not knowing about the course is the main reason for former collisions, and that there is no other ways to know about the routes of aircrafts.
Step 3: Truth (common sense, alternative explanations, and counterexamples)
But common sense informs us that the reasons of a collision might be attributed to many other factors from both within and without, and that air traffic control has more effective measures like GPS to coordinate navigation.
If the former collisions were mostly resulting from the fatigue of pilots or from the malfunction in some part of the plane, then these collisions would not be avoided even if we had installed such warning system that can only signal the course of a plane.
Step 4: MIT
The article describes a warning system capable of receiving signals from another transponder via radio and thus able to determine the course of plane. This description might have been attempting to mislead us into believing that not knowing about the course is the main reason for former collisions, and that there is no other ways to know about the routes of aircrafts. But common sense informs us that the reasons of a collision might be attributed to many other factors from both within and without, and that air traffic control has more effective measures like GPS to coordinate navigation. So if the former collisions were mostly resulting from the fatigue of pilots or from the malfunction in some part of the plane, then these collisions would not be avoided even if we had installed such warning system that can only signal the course of a plane.
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TIM
Common sense informs us that the reasons of a collision might be attributed to many other factors from both within and without, and that air traffic control has more effective measures like GPS to coordinate navigation. So if the former collisions were mostly resulting from the fatigue of pilots or from the malfunction in some part of the plane, then these collisions would not be avoided even if we had installed such warning system that can only signal the course of a plane. But the speaker might have been attempting to mislead us into believing that not knowing about the course is the main reason for former collisions, and that there is no other ways to know about the routes of aircrafts. To bolster this belief, the article describes a warning system capable of receiving signals from another transponder via radio and thus able to determine the course of plane. Unfortunately, this description could merely serve to strengthen one possibility but has failed to rule out other possibilities mentioned above.
(170 words)
结尾：Flaws and Suggestions
Step 1: Flaws
computerized, commercial, plane’s course
In short of accuracy are three assumptions, respectively: a computerized system would efficiently perform without bugs; commercial airlines might not collide with other non-commercial airliners; and inability to know plane’s course was the main reason for former collisions.
Step 2: Suggestions
a plane, operation, flying conditions; planes, all types
A better investigation is therefore needed, which should carefully explore a plane’s operation and its flying conditions, and thoroughly list all sorts of flying objects that might cause collisions.
Step 3: Flaws + Suggestions
For a final evaluation on this article, in short of accuracy are at least three assumptions, respectively: a computerized system would efficiently perform without bugs; commercial airlines might not collide with other non-commercial airliners; and inability to know plane’s course was the main reason for former collisions. Given insufficient data to solidify these and other hypotheses, a better investigation is therefore needed, which should carefully explore a plane’s operation and its flying conditions, and thoroughly list all sorts of flying objects that might cause collisions.
(85 words)
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