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剑桥雅思真题范文分析系列十二

信息来源:运维  发布时间:2015-05-28

  本文为大家带来的是剑桥雅思真题范文分析系列十二,希望考生能够多多参考,以便更好的备考雅思 试。想要拿到雅思高分就需要考生坚持到最后,不轻言放弃。

  雅思作文题目:

  Some people think that a sense of competition in children should he encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

  Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

  Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own or experience.(剑5 test3 task2)

  范文:

  Competitiveness among humans, based largely on selfishness, seems to be a more instinctive trait than co-operation, which seems to be mostly learned behaviour. Although both of these traits have evolved to ensure our survival as a species, I believe that our continued survival will depend on our ability to co-operate and this will only result from fostering a greater sense of co-operation in children rather than encouraging competitiveness. No form of behaviour can be more useful to humanity than that which ensures our survival.

  Prehistoric humans competed for resources such as access to wild animals and this resulted in fighting and killing other humans. This ensured the survival of the fittest in the struggle against the threats of nature. Although intelligence played a part in fighting, physical strength was the predominant factor, reflecting our need to overcome physical challenges to our survival. Today, however, we humans use intelligence to overcome our challenges and ensure our survival but warfare and the killing of other humans continues. With the destructive power of nuclear warfare, our whole species is threatened and it is imperative that we learn to co-operate more with each other and eliminate war. Towards this aim, selfishness and unbridled competition must be discouraged in children because the inevitable result will be war over dwindling natural resources.

  Of course, not all competition is negative. Fair competition in business results in greater efficiency; intellectual competition ensures the best intellectual output from humans; and sports, especially team sports, are a useful substitute for war between groups of humans. However, in reality, all humanity is now interdependent and, for the benefit of all, it is vital that we accentuate sharing and co-operation.

  一、话题类型:

  教育类

  二、题目类型:

  讨论类

  三、题目简要内容:

  A方-孩子应该被鼓励竞争意识;B方-孩子应该被教合作。

  四、素材积累:

  competitive 竞争的

  co-operation 合作

  instinctive trait 本能的特点

  learned behavior 习得的行为

  compete for为…竞争

  the survival of the fittest适者生存

  五、论据积累:

  竞争与合作各有利弊,我们要通过对比以及举例的方式来进行论证,不是空头说。

  竞争:是为了生存,合作:是为了更好的生存。

  六、结构分析:

  题目翻译:

  一些人认为应该鼓励孩子的竞争精神,而另一些人认为教育孩子合作而不是竞争才能让他们成才,讨论这两种观点并提出你自己的看法。

  分析:

  写作时需要分析两种观点各自的理由,并提出自己的看法。自己的看法可以偏向两种观点中的某一个,也可以是两种观点的综合分析。

  第一段:

  通过对比(竞争与合作)的方式引出话题:

  Competitiveness among humans, based largely on selfishness, seems to be a more instinctive trait than co-operation, which seems to be mostly learned behaviour.

  与作为后天习得行为的合作比较而言,建立在自私基础上的人与人之间的竞争似乎更是人的一种本能。

  base on 在...的基础上

  instinctive 本能的

  接下来,通过转折表达自己的观点:Although both of these traits have evolved to ensure our survival as a species, I believe that our continued survival will depend on our ability to co-operate and this will only result from fostering a greater sense of co-operation in children rather than encouraging competitiveness. No form of behaviour can be more useful to humanity than that which ensures our survival. (对于人类而言,没有什么能比这一确保生存的行为更有用的了。)

  evolve 逐步形成

  depend on 取决于,依赖

  result from 起因于,由...造成

  foster培养,养育

  第二段:

  分析为什么竞争是人的本性(通过举例):Prehistoric humans competed for resources such as access to wild animals and this resulted in fighting and killing other humans. This ensured the survival of the fittest in the struggle against the threats of nature.(这一行为确保了在与自然界斗争中的适者生存。)

  Prehistoric humans 史前人类

  Although intelligence played a part in fighting, physical strength was the predominant factor, reflecting our need to overcome physical challenges to our survival.

  接下来,谈及为什么我们需要扼制过分的竞争(转折的方式):Today, however, we humans use intelligence to overcome our challenges and ensure our survival but warfare and the killing of other humans continues. With the destructive power of nuclear warfare, our whole species is threatened and并谈论合作的价值所在:

  it is imperative that we learn to co-operate more with each other and eliminate war. Towards this aim, selfishness and unbridled competition must be discouraged in children because the inevitable result will be war over dwindling natural resources.

  predominant 主要的

  imperative 必要的

  eliminate 消除

  unbridled adj. 放肆的;无拘束的;激烈的

  inevitable 不可避免的

  dwindling 减少

  第三段:

  第三段在论述适度并合理的竞争的好处的基础上,再次强调我们应该教育孩子合作而不是竞争(通过举例的方式):

  论述适度并合理的竞争的好处(通过举例的方式)Of course, not all competition is negative.(不是所有的竞争都是有害的。)

  1. Fair competition in business(商业竞争) results in greater efficiency;

  2. intellectual competition(智力竞争) ensures the best intellectual output from humans; and

  3. sports, especially team sports,(体育、尤其是团队项目) are a useful substitute for war between groups of humans.

  再次强调我们应该教育孩子合作而不是竞争:However(转折表达), in reality, all humanity is now interdependent and, for the benefit of all, it is vital that we accentuate sharing and co-operation.

  substitute 代替品

  accentuate 强调

  interdependent 相互依存的

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