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相当赞的雅思大作文之文化类例题分析

信息来源:网络  发布时间:2015-06-09

  备考雅思写作需要考生对各种题型都有深入的了解才能轻松应对。下面,前程百利小编为大家带来的是相当赞的雅思大作文之文化类例题分析,希望对考生有所帮助。

  雅思作文题目:

  Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

  Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. (剑6 test3 task2)

  范文:

  In the recent years, between the different countries, a lot of people keen on visit to other countries. These people like to learn the different cultural and reconize different things from the other countries.

  In my opinion, every host country should welcome cultural differences. Because the visitors were stay a short time for their journey. They will travel and shopping in the cities. Sometime, they can bring up the cultural and enconomic were development. .Although, the language and the lifestyle are different, but we shall learn from their language.

  Some people cannot accept the visitors. I think they afair to effect the local customs. And... the don't the visitors behaviour were effect to their countries saft. Therefore the cannot accept. The visitors might be the crime and escept from their countries, However, they afarid the visitors whose will destronye their countries.

  In summerise, the people should accept the host country and welcome cultural differences. They will earn a lot for other countries, such as cultural, religious, know ledge, Ants, etc. If they can accept the other countries visitors. They might be benefit a lot than they needs.

  一、话题类型:

  文化类

  二、题目类型:

  讨论类

  三、题目简要内容:

  A方-到国外去的游客应该入乡随俗;B方-东道主国家应该欢迎包容文化差异

  四、素材积累:

  are keen on喜爱,渴望

  bring up提出;教育;养育;呕出;(船等)停下

  五、论据积累:

  正面影响:

  旅游会促进国家之间的文化交流;

  接触与学习他国的优秀历史文化;

  促进国家间的相互理解与包容;

  维护世界和平;

  ...

  负面影响:

  文化同化;

  影响土著居民的文化以及少数民族语言;

  文化全球化也会导致人们的思想,或是行为一致,而缺乏个性或是创新;

  ...

  六、结构分析:

  整体分析:

  首先,本文从篇幅上来看很明显的是字数不够,仅有187字,因此会因为字数不够而失分。

  再次,文章虽然分析了题中的两种观点,但是并没有展开叙述,观点也不是很清晰,

  而且文章也有较多的语法错误,会导致读者很难理解文章意思。

  比如:

  冠词:

  文中In the recent years, between the different countries...本句的两个定冠词the应该删除,因为近年来和不同国家之间都是泛指,而不是特指。

  词性:

  ...like to learn the different cultural…句中cultural应改为名词cultures。

  ...effect the local customs. 句中effect应改为动词affect。

  …such as cultural, religious, knowledge, Arts, etc…形容词 cultural和religious 应改为名词culture, religion。

  拼写:

  Peope, reconize, enconomoic, althought, escept,afaird, destronye, summerise, earn 应改该为 people, recognize,economic, although, escape, afraid,destroy, summarise, learn 。

  用词:

  I think they affair to effect the local customs.句中affair应改为are afraid。

  The visitors might be the crime. 应改为The visitors might commit crimes.

  However, they afaid the visitors whose will destronye their countries. 应改为 However, they are afraid of the visitors who will destroy their country.

  They will earn a lot for other countries. 应改为They will learn a lot from other countries.

  句子:

  lot of people keen on visit …缺少动词are, 应为are keen on, visit应改为 visiting。

  Because the visitors were stay a short time... 这个because引导的是从句,不能独立成句。

  If they can accept the other countries visitors …为从句,不能独立成句。

  逐段分析:

  第一段:

  题目中是让考生先讨论both views然后在给出自己的观点,而本文第一段直接给出。

  第二段:

  作者认为到他国旅游的游客短时间的停留会带动文化和经济的发展。

  第三段:

  作者认为到他国旅游的游客可能会影响他国的习俗,安全甚至引起犯罪现象。

  结尾段:

  作者总结自己观点,认为到他国旅游有一定好处。

  参考译文:

  近年来,在不同国家之间,许多人很想去别的国家旅游。他们喜欢学习不同的文化,从别的国家那里辨认不同的事物。

  我认为,每个东道国都应该欢迎文化差异。因为游客只待很短的一段时间。他们会在城市旅行和购物。有时候,他们会带来文化和经济发展。虽然语言和文化不同,但我们会学习他们的语言。

  一些人不能接受游客。我觉得他们害怕当地习俗会受影响。而且游客的行为会对他们国家有影响。因此他们不能接受。游客可能会犯罪,逃离他们的国家。但是,他们害怕游客会摧毁他们国家。

  总之,人们应该接受东道国,欢迎文化差异。他们会从其他国家学到很多东西,比如文化、宗教、知识、艺术等,如果他们能够接受其他国家的游客的话。他们可能会得到比需要的还要多的好处。

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