据统计，中国考生的雅思写作平均分是5.4~5.7，远低于世界各国雅思写作的平均分。希望这篇雅思写作有哪些致命的失分点对大家备考有帮助。
我们可以先观察两段5分作文和7分作文的文章：
考试题目——International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?
5分作文——
International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?
In my opinion advantages outweight the disadvantages. Firstly, many countries like Egypt or Tailand live from tourism. Lots of people work there as a seilsmens or tourist guides. These countries without support of tourists wouldn’t be able to funtcion properly.
Secondly, in countries visited by tourists are plenty of places where people just can’t pass because of rare animals or plants. Another thing is that people like traveling and seeing new exotic places. They like lie on the beach or swim in ocean.
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7分作文——
Tourism is a very big industry in the modern time and is growing quite rapidly. Thousands of people travel everywhere to various destinations every year. Arguments have come up regarding the benefits and negative impacts of tourism in places and on its local inhabitants and environment; however, I believe there are more advantages than disadvantages of international tourism.
People travel for various reasons; we travel for business purposes, holidays, visit friends and relatives etc. Travelling is mostly seen as a recreational activity. Tourism has many advantages. Tourism can play a tremendous part in a countrys economy, the more tourists visit a country and spend money there, the better it is for the country; that way more money is circulated within the country and even the stability of their currencys rate of exchange persists if not improve. Vendors and shops get to sell more goods and make an income. Tourism also has its non-monetary advantages; it brings cultures and people closer. People from all around the world get to share their culture with each other and even learn more. This is a good opportunity in education.
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我们可以总结出雅思写作低分的四个致命原因：
1. 词汇很简单
很多考生雅思写作只拿到5分或者5.5分的原因就是整篇文章中的词汇特别简单，或者在文章中总是用同一个词汇来表达，不会去选择它的同义词汇或者近义词汇或者该词的其他形式来表达相同的意思，让考官觉得考生的写作词汇量掌握的太少。
通过对比上面的例子我们可以发现，7分的词汇量更多，但是5分的词汇量也不少，为什么会在词汇方面扣那么多分呢?这主要是因为5分作文中对词汇的使用能力不强，比如说live from应该改为live on。甚至还会出现一些单词拼写的错误，比如说，Tailand应该写成Thailand， seilsmens应该写成salesmen，funtcion写成function。
2、句式很单一
雅思低分作文另一个显著的特征就是句式比较单一，结构比较简单，基本上整篇文章的句子结构都是五大基本句型，偶尔用了一些简单的复杂句式，还会出现语法错误。还是看上面的例子，5分作文中除了第一段的there be句型之外几乎句句都是简单句，as a seilsmens or tourist guides犯了语法错误，应改成as salesmen or tourist guides。而7分作文中用了很多的加分句式，比如说the more…the more…if条件状语，而且段落中出现了大量的分句形式。
3、结构不合理
雅思写作一般是议论文，这篇例子是Discussion类的议论文。我们首先需要在首段引出自己的观点，然后讨论它的好处和弊端，一般就是2~3个自然段，最后重申自己的观点。这两篇文章都没有显示完全，但是我们让然可以看出5分作文结构上的一些不足。比如说，首段直接摘抄了考试题目，虽然讨论了这个现象，最后却以一般疑问句结尾，没有给出考生的观点，这犯了雅思写作的大忌。而且，如果去掉了首段，文章的字数显然会不满足考试要求。
而7分作文我们可以看出首段首先描述了这种现象，然后引出人们的争论，最后给出自己的观点，一气呵成，符合考试的要求。
4、逻辑太乱序
雅思写作也特别强调考生的逻辑是否合理。因为逻辑一旦发生错误，整个段落或者整篇文章可能就会让人不知所云，不知道作者要传达怎样的意思。还是看上面的例子，5分作文中第三段话Secondly, in countries visited by tourists are plenty of places where people just can’t pass because of rare animals or plants. Another thing is that people like traveling and seeing new exotic places. They like lie on the beach or swim in ocean.
显然这段话是要说明国际旅游的好处，但是第一句和旅游的好处显然没有任何关系，也不应该作为一个分论点，使文章的逻辑不合理。
而7分作文显然表达的观点比较清晰有条理：
People travel for various reasons; we travel for business purposes, holidays, visit friends and relatives etc. Travelling is mostly seen as a recreational activity. Tourism has many advantages. Tourism can play a tremendous part in a countrys economy……Tourism also has its non-monetary advantages; it brings cultures and people closer……
当然了，7分作文也有不足之处，比如这段话中详细表达了分论点本身，但是却没有足够的事例或者数据来支撑这个分论点。
上面就是给大家分享的雅思写作低分备考的致命因素，仅供参考。最后，小编预祝大家考出满意的雅思成绩。
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