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托福写作tpo 综合写作典型分析(一)

信息来源:网络  发布时间:2012-03-27

  托福写作tpo 综合写作范文及分析如下:

  阅读材料:

  In the United States, employees typically work five days a week for eight hours each day. However, many employees want to work a four-day week and are willing to accept less pay in order to do so. A mandatory policy requiring companies to offer their employees the option of working a four-day workweek for four-fifths (80 percent) of their normal pay would benefit the economy as a whole as well as the individual companies and the employees who decided to take the option.

  The shortened workweek would increase company profits because employees would feel more rested and alert, and as a result, they would make fewer costly errors in their work. Hiring more staff to ensure that the same amount of work would be accomplished would not result in additional payroll costs because four-day employees would only be paid 80 percent of the normal rate. In the end, companies would have fewer overworked and error-prone employees for the same money, which would increase company profits.

  For the country as a whole, one of the primary benefits of offering this option to employees is that it would reduce unemployment rates. If many full-time employees started working fewer hours, some of their workload would have to be shifted to others. Thus, for every four employees who went on an 80 percent week, a new employee could be hired at the 80 percent rate.

  Finally, the option of a four-day workweek would be better for individual employees. Employees who could afford a lower salary in exchange for more free time could improve the quality of their lives by spending the extra time with their families, pursuing private interests, or enjoying leisure activities.

  阅读部分需要提取的观点是:

  - Main point: A mandatory policy requiring companies to offer their employees the option of working a four-day workweek for four-fifths (80 percent) of their normal pay would benefit the economy as a whole as well as the individual companies and the employees who decided to take the option.

  - Sub point 1: The shortened workweek would increase company profits.

  - Sub point 2: the country as a whole will benefits.

  - Sub point 3: the option of a four-day workweek would be better for individual employees.

  观点抽出方法:

  - 这篇文章没有在观点抽取的时候为我们设置障碍,Main point就乖乖地出现在首段段尾,sub points都是在段首出现的。但是需要提醒的是千万不要把support和detail作为point提取出来。在独立写作的时候,大家常犯的一个错误就是把support和detail作为point放在段首,在阅读部分也还是难以压抑对support和detail的重视。在提取point的时候不要把细节搅和进来。比如就不能说第一个sub point是员工效率更高;第二个sub point是可以降低失业率,第三个sub point是可以提高生活质量。如果用细节当point,就会在听力部分发现点对点对不上了,因为不是所有题目都是会反驳阅读部分的细节的。即便是,但是逻辑层面不对还是错的。所以,真正的理解point的含义是非常重要的,point的是观点,不提炼出来的态度,而不应该是一些起支撑作用的细节。

  - 我们自查sub point的方法就是它是否是支持main point。有的时候sub point是main point 的一部分,这段就是一个典型,有的时候sub point从不同方面支持main point。但是如果抓到的是细节,那么就没有这样直接的逻辑关系,则不可用。这样的视角也可以用在独立写作的自查上,看看自己找的sub point到底对不对。

  在听力部分,我们可以预测到的就是这个四天工作制是没有哪个方面可以从中获益的,在听的时候我们一定要注意那些表原因的词汇,这样我们才能找到重点。

  Offering employees the option of a four-day workweek won’t affect the company profits, economic conditions or the lives of employees in the ways the reading suggests.

  First, offering a four-day workweek will probably force companies to spend more, possibly a lot more. Adding new workers means putting much more money into providing training and medical benefits. Remember the costs of things like health benefits can be the same whether an employee works four days or five. And having more employees also requires more office space and more computers. These additional costs would quickly cut into company profits.

  Second, with respect to overall employment, it doesn’t follow that once some employees choose a four-day workweek; many more jobs will become available. Hiring new workers is costly, as I argued a moment ago. And companies have other options. They might just choose to ask their employees to work overtime to make up the difference. Worse, companies might raise expectations. They might start to expect that their four-day employees can do the same amount of work they used to do in five days. If this happens, then no additional jobs will be created and current jobs will become more unpleasant.

  Finally, while a four-day workweek offers employees more free time to invest in their personal lives, it also presents some risks that could end up reducing their quality of life. Working a shorter week can decrease employees’ job stability and harm their chances for advancing their careers. Four-day employees are likely to be the first to lose their jobs during an economic downturn. They may also be passed over for promotions because companies might prefer to have five-day employees in management positions to ensure continuous coverage and consistent supervision for the entire workweek.

  部分表达方法:passage, material

  听力部分表达方法:lecture, the professors says

  同意: say, argue, claim, opinion, hold the view that, figure, deem, believe, reckon, consider, opinion, proposition.

  反对:on contrary, by contrast, argue against, refute, object, hold a totally different view, oppose, be against.

  TIP:在行文过程中,需要变化的是表示同意或者反对的功能性词汇,而表示阅读部分和听力部分的指代型词汇请不要变化。

  文章结构:

  第一段:要表达的内容有:passage部分的主观点,lecture部分的主观点,以及两者之间的关系。

  第二段:passage部分的sub point 1,lecture部分对应的sub point,lecture里面相对应的support和details。

  第三段:passage部分的sub point 2,lecture部分对应的sub point,lecture里面相对应的support和details。

  第四段:passage部分的sub point 3,lecture部分对应的sub point,lecture里面相对应的support和details。

  TIP:没有必要在文章中出现passage部分的support和details,或者说不能出现。

  例文(仅供参考)

  综合写作对语言的要求是清晰表达,准确转述即可。没有必要可以的追求语言的华丽,把话说清楚最重要。有的同学语言使用的能力还有一定局限的情况下,千万不要刻意追求句式的复杂化,而出现不必要的错误,就得不偿失了。

  The passage argues that four-day work week will benefit companies, the whole economy, and individuals. But in the lecture, the professor holds a totally different view that no one will be beneficial from the new work week.

  Firstly, the passage says that companies will get more profits for employees can work more effectively. However, the lecture points out that four-day workweek will lead to spend more. That is because companies have to spend more money on training, medical benefits, office positions, even new computers.

  Secondly, the passage claims that the four-day workweek is a way to reduce unemployment rates. The lecture refutes the idea completely. Admittedly, there are more available jobs, but companies will prefer to let employees work overtime to finish them for hiring new staff is too expensive. In addition, the companies may lift their expectation that staff finish five-day jobs within four-day.

  Thirdly, the passage suggests that individual employees can benefit from it. Though the four-day workweek can provide more leisure time to employees, the lecture argues against the passage. Comparing to five-day workers, the four-day workweek employees may be the first one to be fire during economic depression. And they will have less chance to promotion because companies wish that managers could be on duty every work day.

  以上托福写作tpo的范文是从材料中如何取材到形成自己的观点,至最后成文的一个过程整体的描述,这对托福综合习作的思路有很大的参考价值,希望可以帮助托福考生更好地备考托福。

 

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