托福独立写作易犯错误。托福写作部分分为综合写作(Integrated writing)和独立写作(Independent writing)两块。
独立写作要求：考生要在30分钟内完成一篇表达个人观点的作文。字数应在300词以上。题目多为问考生是赞成还是反对某一观点，观点没有对错之分，只需要表明自己的观点，言之成理即可。题干很容易理解，学生作文一般要写4段或5段。如果是4段体，中间段落只需要论述两个分论点。
这些就是对独立写作的总体介绍。看上去写作要求并不是很难达到，但是还是有许多学生很难拿到独立写作满意的分数。大家在写作时并不能完全按照要求来写，容易犯一些错误。
这篇文章就让我们来分析一下学生在写作时容易犯的错误吧！
打开ETS出版的托福考试官方指南(OG)，你会看到，ETS在组织，展开论点和语言表达方面提出了考核标准。以一个学生的作文为例子，从这三个方面来一一解读学生们易犯的错误。题目来自独立写作机经：政府不应该给艺术家任何经济支持。
Nowadays, the art is becoming more and more important in some developing countries, at the same time the modern art rapidly influence the whole world. On the contrary, i do not consider that the government should give the financial support to art.
Most of the art, such as the dance, play, concerts and so forth, can make a living by themselves since these are not free. On the other hand, if the government gives enough financial support the relevant actors and the editors will probably not to create the new formation and stimulate the whole field development because the funding of the government would break the normal economic rules and lead to the competition, which makes the most of the actors and editors diligent to create lose it own effect. Accordingly, without the financial support is the most benefit way to support the art developing.
第一论点讲财政支持会打破经济秩序，会使艺术很难像之前那样发展。
As the global number of the population is increasing, many social problems occur, like the matter of natural resource, the global starving. According that the government should investigate the protection of the endanger animals, the protection of the rainforest and searching the new resource for release the pressure of the atmosphere. For example the government can investigate some science projects for release the air pollution and the drain of the fossil resource. The hybrid automobile is a best example, since such vehicles can efficiently release the pressure from the trend of global warming and save more fossil fuel.
Furthermore, the government also can fund the education, building the new school and training the teachers. As we all know, the education is the most important part of the society. Letting more and more students to get the better educational resource is a essential thing for human developing, so the government funding will make more chances for the students and make the teacher receive more training time.
第二论点讲很多“社会问题”亟待解决，国家应该把经济支持用在更需要的地方。
In sum, the government should not to investigate the art since , the one facet, the art can develop by itself or even better than acquire the government support, on the other, there are some necessary problems need to be solved. As these problems i cannot agree with this assertion.
1在“组织上”上OG提到了三个关键词“Unity统一性，Progression渐进性, Coherence连贯性”。
让我们来看学生的问题：
连贯性问题，在连接词On the contrary，On the other hand，Accordingly, Furthermore等等使用不正确。因为错误的使用，很容易使读者产生理解偏差。
渐进性问题：看倒数第二段Furthermore，学生本意应该是提出第三个论点，但是根据内容，和第二段只是具体例子不同，论点指向却是一样的。并没有做到论点的层层递进，只是同层重复论述。
2.在“论点展开上”要求 “很好地展开论点、运用恰当清晰的解释、例证和细节”。
学生问题：第一个论点处，只是在用大量辞藻叙述某个问题确实存在，空洞，没有实质内容。
3.“语言运用上”要求作文的句子结构多样、措辞应贴切得体。
学生的问题：Most of the art, such as the dance, play, concerts and so forth, can make a living by themselves since these are not free.有些看不懂。
As the global number of the population is increasing 表达中式化
For example the government can investigate some science projects for release the air pollution and the drain of the fossil resource. 表达中式化
文章还有一些表达上的细节问题，但是不影响理解。但是小问题太多。
好了，这个学生作文中犯的错误当然不能代表所有考生，但是据OG分析的这些问题还是很有代表性的，希望大家学习之后可以自己在写作时避免这些问题，拿到独立写作高分。若您想了解托福考试更多相关信息请关注前程百利考试。
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