在批改考生文章的过程中，小编发现，考生最大的问题点就是文章内容空洞，没有严谨的结构和语言来阐述自己的观点。首先，考生有时是为了凑字而使用一些词汇，这样完全没有必要。其次，由于词汇或者是素材的限制，文章经常出现重复内容。最后就是语法把握不准，经常有错误出现。那么，针对以上这三点问题，前程百利小编和大家分享托福写作需要注意的三点内容。
注意事项一：避免空洞的词汇和词组
1. 一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息，完全可以被删掉。
When all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion.这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。
2. 有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换。
Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time.
“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子，可以替换为Because.
注意事项二：避免语言的重复使用
1. 尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复，但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。
The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.
large 对一个farm来说就是size方面的large，所以in size可以去掉改为：The farm my grandfather grew up on was large.更简洁的表达方式为：My grandfather grew up on a large farm.
2. 有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换。
My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents’ farm.
这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly，更为简洁：My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents’ farm.
注意事项三：选择恰当的语法结构
选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要，但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。
1. 一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。
The situation that resulted in my grandfather’s not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm.
从意思上来分析，上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather’s not being able to study”，而在表达这个概念时，原句用的主语是situation，谓语动词是was，不能强调需要表达的重点概念。
改为：My grandfather couldn’ t study engineering because his father needed help on the farm.
2. 避免频繁使用“there be”结构。
There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather.可以改为更简洁的句式：My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.
3. 把从句改为短语或单词。
Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote.
简介的表达方式为：The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university.
4. 仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候，才使用被动语态。
In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather’s family.本句不够简洁的原因使用了被动语态。
改为：In the fall, my grandfather’s family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.
5. 用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语。
My grandfather didn’t have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends.
Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达，即loiter：
My grandfather didn’t have time to loiter with his school friends.
以上就是前程百利小编分享的托福写作中考生常出现的三个问题，希望考生能够引以为戒，在托福写作中尽量避免以上错误的出现，从而更好地完成托福写作任务，取得高分。
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