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如何行云流水般备战雅思大作文(2)

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  雅思写作高分的取得并非易事,但是小编相信,只要你有对的方法,加以练习,一定会进步。本文继续为大家带来精彩内容,教你如何行云流水般备战雅思大作文。一起来学习吧。

  第五是结尾段的总结。

  通常结尾段与主体段的连接非常简单,如In summary, to conclude等等,而难点在于总结的内容。重申自己的观点是最常用的策略,但是如果想让整个文章更有整体感,建议重申不应只片面重复自己的观点,而应把对方的观点也涵盖进去,阐述清楚对立双方的关系。

  例如远程办公的利弊讨论,如果文章立场倾向于有优势,那么结论可以这样写:

  In summary, telework, as a flexible and economic way of work, satisfies people’s various needs in life and free people from restriction in location and time, hence welcomed by people in many walks of life. It is true that telecommuting is not mature enough at present and not suitable for all positions or jobs,but I believe it will gain more popularity in the near future.

  如果倾向劣势,可以这样写:

  To conclude, employees working at home may gain more flexibility and save money for the employers,but they are more likely to find themselves losing connection with the society, which is against human nature. If the significance of work is beyond making money, then telework should not be advocated.

  以上两种结论中都有一个转折词‘but’,在这个连接词的前后同学们可以看到题目中的两个对立面。也就是说,虽然有偏向性,但是对立双方的关系在结论中是阐明了的。

  如果中立,那么对立双方的关系会很自然地出现在结论段,写法如下:

  Overall, my view is that whether adopt telecommuting depends on the worker and the type of his/her job. If the worker can tune in well and the job can be accomplished individually, for instance, freelance writing or computer programming, or the workers are self-motivated enough, then telework may be optimal. Otherwise, it should not be encouraged.

  第六是段落的中心内容与中心句。

  一个段落只有一个中心思想,这个中心思想通常会体现在一个总结性的句子当中,这句话叫做中心句。中心句在学术文章中常常落在段首,以方便阅读。中心句如同射击的靶子,要直指文章主题,这样后面的论点才不会偏离题目,因此非常重要。

  上面关于看电视太多的段落,中心句就写的非常明确。下面再给同学们一些句子,可以灵活应用于立论段,即证明自己观点的段落。

  It is hard to argue with the fact that workers are the direct/ firstbeneficiaries of this working fashion.

  There is no doubt that many employees would favour/welcome telework.

  Statistics show that there are few things which impact the human mind morethan mass media.

  The mass media hold a large share of importance in society.

  A life without the presence of mass media would seem improbable formany.

  However, this does not mean that …

  下面是一些可以用于让步段的中心句:

  there are certainly some minor downsides in....

  I admit that … is not perfect.

  I understand why some people oppose....

  Of course there are some opposite voices against....

  the disapproving voices also sound reasonable.

  It is natural to regard a university as a phase preparing for a futurejob…

  the other side of the argument is also valid.

  Surely pushing their children towards academic study makes sense forparents.

  You cannot be honest without admitting ….

  第七是连接手段使用得自然多样。

  论点之间如何连接?有哪些连接手段?下面这个段落的中心内容是看电视太多产生的问题,共有三个论点。所使用的连接手段是正确有效的,但是单一,少变化。每一个论点之间都使用了副词做连接词,而且都是在句首。

  Watching TV too much can lead to a number of problems. Firstly, it is bad for children’s health. For example, they tend to have poor eyesight and a weak body. Secondly, if children spend too much time watching TV, they would have less opportunity to interact with their peers. This can contribute to their feeling of loneliness and isolation from the society. Last but not least,watching TV too long, children may become less active mentally because TV is considered as inactive activity by many researches.

  下面的段落是对照版本。其中使用了代词,副词和形容词等多种连接手段,而且做到了自然衔接:

  Watching TV too much can lead to a number of problems and the most obvious one is the negative impact on physical health of children. For example, they tend to have poor eyesight and a weak body. Another concern is about social development of children. If they spend too much time watching TV, they would have less opportunity to interact with their peers. This can contribute to their feeling of loneliness and isolation from the society. Children watching TV too long may also become less active mentally because TV is considered as inactive activity by many researches.

  第八是指示代词的准确使用。

  中文和英文在指示代词上有较大的区别。中文习惯重复名词,而英文则强调用代词。

  如‘我今天把钱包丢了,我那个钱包可好看了。’而相对应的英文表达是使用代词而不再重复钱包这个名词,‘I lost my purse today, and it was so cute.’ 或者 ‘I lost my purse, which was socute.’流畅度高的文章指示代词使用正确,指向清楚。

  下面这两句话当中有两个代词it,但是存在指代不清的问题:

  Government’s investment is always the focus that people pay more attentionto. Recently, it becomes a controversy that whether it should support the athletes to join the worldwide competitions.

  前一个it指代后面whether从句,后一个it指代government.为了理清关系,减少模糊,最好不用形式主语这个句型,而是直接把主语从句放在主语的位置上。修改如下:

  Government’s budget is always the attention focus of the public. Whether it should support the athletes to join the worldwide competitions causes controversy.

  同学们要有强烈的自我意识,即‘这是我的观点,我在跟考官交流讨论,我要说服他/她’。当有话要说不吐不快的时候,才容易写出流畅的有整体感的文章。相反,对话题陌生,无话可讲,又不得不硬往外挤的时候,往往会东一句西一句地拼凑,导致整体感丧失殆尽,语言再好都无法弥补。这篇文章只是对于整体感这个概念的阐述,如果想真正上手,还是需要做一些练习。

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