万事开头难，好的开始就是成功的一半，所以在托福写作中，有一个良好的开篇，会给阅卷考官一个良好的印象，但是有些文章的开头却不是很好的，在此前程百利考试小编就来列举十个托福写作失败开头案例，希望考生能够引以为戒。
一、废话连篇不知所云型
典型失败案例：
Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?
Poor：This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……
Better: In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married.
Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information?
Poor: OK, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.
Better: People who are used to obtain the knowledge from books may have noticed the significant change in recent years-if they would like to know the history of an oriental country or the name of an unknown frog found in the wildness, they are always recommended to find it on Wikipedia instead of a printed one. One day, these new technology will replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information.
二、中式英文人见人晕型
典型失败案例：
Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life
In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……
Topic 2- The population problem
The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.
Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?
I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get “baoying”.
三、观点模糊态度暧昧型
典型失败案例：
Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……
四、偏离主题无轨电车型
典型失败案例：
Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.
五、语法错误惨不忍睹型
典型失败案例：
Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished?
About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.
六、过分简单没有重点型
典型失败案例：
Topic-The importance of environmental protection
This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!
七、用词不当 表达不准型
典型失败案例：
Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.
八、意思重复原地踏步型
典型失败案例：
Topic-Your opinion on DINK families
My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.
九、中国俗语胡乱翻译型
典型失败案例：
Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family?
I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……
正确说法：Happiness lies in having many children
Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance?
We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know, don’t know is don’t know”……
Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family?
Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”.
十、观点武断 态度强硬型
典型失败案例：
Topic 1-The importance of confidence
In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don’t have confidence, they all have failed.
Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem
I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.
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